青衫烟雨点评人：华南师范大学文学院 副教授 陈一平
第三篇：让爱双向流动
中国有句名言说道：“滴水之恩，当涌泉相报。”可见，报答他人的善意是中华民族的传统美德，并被沿袭了下来。这是有一定道理的。人都有需要帮助的时候，如果接受了帮助却当作理所当然，而不怀感激之心，报答以爱的话，谁还愿意提供帮助呢？因此，为了社会和谐发展，请莫伤好人心，让爱双向流动。
令人可喜的是，心怀感激的人在我们的社会是占主流的。当一个白手起家的商人发财致富时，他必定不会忘记自己以往艰苦的日子，这也就使他有了传递爱意给那些还有需要的人的愿望。我们都是凡夫俗子，相信大多数人是愿意品尝到感激的喜悦之情的。当施舍者看到自己帮助的人懂得回报，哪怕不是对自己，而是对社会、他人，他已经看到自己所为的价值，这无疑让他产生了延续自己善举的动力。这是爱的付出，是爱的双向流动，也是爱的获得，社会因此受益。
也许你只付出了一分，但社会可能受益万分。还记得去年夏天北京那场特大暴雨吗？灾情在播报着，但温情也在上演着。一伙从河北农村赶来的人们救助灾民，置个人安危而不顾的行为受到大家的赞赏。殊不知，他们都是当年唐山大地震的获救者，是众人的无私奉献让他们拥有了继续生存的物资和信心。而现在，不忘回报的他们来帮助另一拨人获得新生。爱与正能量的流动顶托着社会，站立、前进。我们也忘不了那最美丽的乡村教师——伍玉锡，身患胃癌十多年，胃被切除了四分之三的他这么多年来从没落下一节课，从没少批改一次作业。是社会人士和学生以及学生家长的关怀、帮助他支撑在讲台边。这种双向流动的爱比金子更宝贵、更坚硬。
当然也存在着爱的“返回链”缺失的现象。看看陕西一位任内帮众多企业融资，任后却惨被企业“抛弃”的局长便可知，单向的爱是多么痛苦，社会将会变得不那么和谐。
莫让“双向的爱”缺失，让爱传递下去。
【点评】 写考场文章以立意为先。这篇文章之所以优秀就在于其立意境界很高，认为爱不是单向的，而是双向的，还是可以流动的，呼吁“让爱双向流动”。捐助与受助都是爱的表现，彼此应该互相尊重，互有沟通交流，这个世界才会充满爱，并且一直传递下去。从立意这个角度来讲，作者这样的立意在众多考生中算是上乘的，也是最值得肯定的一种立意。
围绕着“让爱双向流动”，作者在第二段，从施舍者的角度，表达了爱的双向流动的意义。第三段，运用了两个事例，作者从受助者的角度表达了爱的流动的价值。第四段从反面例子入手，表达了单向的爱的痛苦。最后发出呼吁：莫让双向的爱缺失，让爱传递下去。
作者思路清晰，紧紧围绕中心展开论述，是一篇考场优秀作文。不足的地方是用例略有不当之处，可以选更恰当的例子。另外，第四段的反面例子写得略嫌仓促，分析未够透彻。
点评人：华南师范大学文学院 讲师 胡家俊
第四篇：慈善，也要维护他人的尊严
材料中，富翁打算向三个贫困家庭提供捐助。一家高兴地接受了捐助。一家犹豫地接受了，但声明一定会偿还。一家谢谢了富翁的好意，但认为这是一种施舍，拒绝了。
我很赞赏第三个家庭的做法，处事大方，不卑不亢，丝毫没有感到低人一等，在拒绝中告诉富翁我们在人格上是平等的。这也启示了我们：在做慈善的过程中要维护受赠者的尊严。
孟子在辨析义与利时曾说：“一箪食，一壶浆，得之则生，弗得则死。呼尔而与之，行道之人弗受；蹴尔而与之，乞人不屑也。”虽然孟子谈的是义与利的辩证关系，但这些话也道出了每个人都是有尊严的，侮辱性的施舍就连乞丐也不
篇三：作文6篇
The Celebration of Western Festivals
Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay entitled The Celebration of Western Festivals.
1.现在国内有不少人喜欢过西方的某些节日。
2.产生这种现象的原因。
3.这种现象可能带来的影响。
In recent years many Chinese people like to celebrate western festivals. Even some youngsters are paying as great attention to Christmas as our Spring Festival. In addition, other western festivals, like April Fool's day and Valentine's Day, are very popular among Chinese people.
Many reasons contribute to this phenomenon.Among them, relaxing and comfortable atmosphere from western festivals plays a critical role. Moreover, more and more Chinese people begin to learn English, which provides them with more chances to be exposed to western culture and festivals. Besides, many businessmen desperately try to boost the atmosphere of foreign festivals to attract more customers.
As far as I am concerned, our paying too much attention to western festivals will bring some side effects .The popularity of western festivals to some extent has influence our traditions. Therefore, I suggest that people should not be immersed too much in the western festivals but ignore Chinese traditional festivals.
be exposed to 意为“暴露于”
As far as I am concerned 用于引出个人观点
bring some side effects 意为“带来负面影响”
to some extent 意为“在某种程度上”
be immersed too much 意为“过分沉浸在。。。中”
Getting to Know the World
outside Campus
Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay entitled Getting to Know the World outside Campus.
1.大学生了解社会的必要性。
2.了解社会的途径（大众媒介，社会服务等）。
3.你打算怎么做。
It is of great significance for a college student to know the world outside the campus. In this fast-developing “Information Age”, college students must keep pace with the progress of the world. Additionally, by contacting the off-campus world, college students can have chance to get more practical skills. Therefore, how to know the world outside the campus is worth our attention.
Many ways can be adopted by our college students to increase our knowledge of the world. Firstly, mass media, such as radios, televisions, newspapers and the
Internet, are a good choice, by which we can be well informed about what is happening. Secondly, providing volunteer services is an efficient way to
contact and know the society. Thirdly, we can take part-time jobs to increase our practical experience.
As for me, I will try to create and grasp more chances to contact the society. In my opinion, getting to know the off-campus world is as important as improving academic performance.Therefore,I suggest every college student should not confine himself to the campus but often go outside.
1. keep pace with 跟上
2. be worth sth/doing 值得
3. not but 连接并列结构，意思是不是。。。而是。。。
Should One Expect a Reward When Doing a Good Deed?
Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay entitled Should One Expect a Reward When Doing a Good Deed?
1.有人做好事期望得到回报。
2.有人认为应该像雷锋那样做好事不图回报。
3.你的观点。
Nowadays, different people hold different views about whether or not one should expect a reward when doing a good deed.Some people think that a
good deed should be given a certain reward.They say it is agreeable with the rule of fairness.Also,rewards can stimulate people's enthusiasm to do good deeds.
However, there are many others who take Leifeng as a good model and be always ready to help others without expecting any reward .Everyone may be in trouble. Only if you help others unselfishly, you can get Other's help when you need it. Besides, they maintain that one can enjoy happiness in doing good deeds, they think, which is the best return.
Weighing up these two arguments, I prefer the second one. First, being happy to help others is one of Chinese people's traditional virtues. Second, this virtue is of more significance for the creation of a harmonious society. To
conclude,it is every citizen's responsibility to do good deeds without expecting any reward.
1. without expecting any reward 不期望任何回报
2. weighing up 意为“权衡”，此句话引出个人观点
3. be of+n 相当于 be+adj
A letter to of Apology
Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write A letter to of Apology to your teacher.
1.表达自己对未能按时交论文一事的歉意
2.说明未能按时交论文的原因。
3.表示自己将尽快补交论文并保证以后按时交作业。
Dear Mr.Wang,
I am writing you this letter to apologize for my failing to hand in the paper on time. I am very sorry for the inconvenience brought by my delay. Please accept my sincere apology with gratitude.
The reason for my delay was that I was knocked down by a cold. Moreover, I had a fever and was too weak to write a single word. Therefore, it's not in my power to finish the paper on time. I hope you could understand me and excuse me for my delay.
I will do my utmost to finish my paper and hand it in as soon as possible .In my opinion, the importance of punctuality you cannot be emphasized too much, so I assure you that I will hand in my homework on time from now on. Sincerely yours
Yu Ming
1.I am writing you this letter to apologize for 道歉信开头常用句式。
2.the inconvenience brought by 意思是“由。。。带来的不便”。
3.Please accept my sincere apology with gratitude 意思是“请接受我诚挚的歉意”。
4.in my power to 意思是“在我能范围内”
5.do my utmost to 意思是“尽最大努力”
6.as soon as possible 意思是“尽快”
7.cannot be emphasized too much 意思是“再怎么强调也不为过”，表示非常重要
